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Soujin ([personal profile] psalm_onethirtyone) wrote2009-04-28 08:06 pm

"Still the Wanting Comes in Waves, in Waves..."

Green Love Song, take 3.0 (THIS IS A HARD POEM TO WRITE).

When I die I think they will tuck me away,
fold the fatness of my sweet body
into a long cardboard box--
--I asked for cardboard--
because people are so afraid of the worms getting in
but my god with all this powerful thick
greatness of me
why shouldn't I feed the hungry? since it's no crime
to eat.
The long reaching roots of a newborn apple tree
will eat the good marrow of my bones
which faithfully supported me for so many years.
The kinked segmented length of earthworms
will eat the dusty whisper of the invisible skin cells
which held me together peacefully.
The shiny mother- of- pearl- maggots,
the iridescent beetles with their broad backs,
they will take what they need from me to strengthen themselves.

So why should anybody buy me a bright copper casket?
They couldn't make one big enough anyway.
It will be cardboard between me and the hungry dirt--
of which there is enough to encompass
anything.

Not that I am in a hurry to die--
when before I am eaten there is still so much
to taste.
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[personal profile] raanve 2009-04-29 01:21 pm (UTC)(link)
One of the things I love best about your writing is that your voice is so strong. (Even when it's not -You-, exactly. I think that makes sense. I am still trying to get the caffeine to boot my brain up.)

If I was a poetry publishing person, I would totally be publishing YOU. You are really very good. (Better than most of the poetry majors I had class with. By far. Heh.)

[identity profile] rainbowjehan.livejournal.com 2009-04-29 05:48 pm (UTC)(link)
^____^ Thank you so much. See, I knew there was a good reason you're my unofficial secret lovah. You boost my self-confidence so. (It does!)

! Meeeeeep. I am trying to put together a book, actually, to start sending in to companies. I have about thirty pages worth so far and I'd kind of like forty before I send it off, just because it seems like a nice number. (XD! Thanks!)
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[personal profile] raanve 2009-04-29 08:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Glad to be of service. ;)