This is unbelievably beautiful. There are so many stories from the Bible that I would love to see told this way -- not in a handful of verses, but in full, with all the character and emotion that properly belong to them but that are all too easily overlooked, since the stories are so brief and myriad. I love the style you chose: very Old Testament, very sober, and yet somehow very intimate. The present tense worked well, too. And I loved the refrain of "I am fifteen years old when my brothers take me into the land of Egypt"/"I was fifteen years old when my brothers brought me into the land of Egypt" -- it's such a simple and elegant way of introducing the conclusion and making the story feel whole, almost circular, as though some necessary thing has been completed. The conclusion with Benjamin seeing into the future is wonderful too.

And, not to turn this into something it was never meant to be, or weird you out with my excessive praise or anything, but I have to wonder if there would be a market for a collection of stories like this. I feel like there would. It's just -- I almost never read fanfic at all anymore, and frankly I think most online writers are unreadable hacks with embarrassing delusions of adequacy, but I've got to tell you, I would pay money for collections of your poetry, or pieces like this one, and I don't think I'm alone. You do wonderful work.