"He'd Entice Any Woman, and So He Has Done Me..."

I wrote a story last night. :D Yay me. It is a present for a RL friend, and I really really really need concrit for it, if anyone is willing to give. <3333

I wrote it in six hours last night, which involved being up until two-thirty, which is not a time I generally enjoy being up to. ^^;;; So it may very well be horrid. I desperately need to know.

( Anna Maria )

"Oh, Hush, Keep it Down, Now, Voices Carry..."

PERI. ZOMG. I NEEEEEED YOU. My chemistry book does not explain the difference between hybridisation and resonance (which is the question), or even what they are. ;_________; Please help me not fail.

(As a side note, the person who wrote my chemistry book is both stupid and a jerk. He has a whole parenthetical bit about how the environment is stupid and the ozone layer may be breaking down, but hell if it actually matters; environmentalist propaganda is making us actually think it's a problem, when it's not. He then went on to explain that it is only breaking down at the north and south poles, where, and I kid you not, it doesn't matter, because it's too cold there for it to spread. Also there are no people.

He then continues: because of all these stupid ozone lies, the US stopped making CFCs, which are dangerous chemicals that saved lives and made refrigeration possible. Now people in third-world countries will starve to death. Also firefighters will not get to victims in houses soon enough, and operations will be less sterile. We are going against God's wishes. (I AM TOTALLY SERIOUS. HE ACTUALLY SAID ALL THIS STUFF.) PROPAGANDA, he went on to say. AL GORE IS A LEFTIST PROPAGANDA EXTREMIST. He recommended some books that refute all this propaganda. He kept using this word. I did not think it means what he thought it means. One of the books had the subtitle 'Whatever Happened to Common Sense?' (italics mine). I DON'T KNOW. MAYBE YOU KILLED IT.

Dammit, sir. I keep trying to let people know that not all Christians (in fact, a large body of Christians) are totally in denial and/or uneducated jerks. YOU'RE NOT HELPING MY CAUSE.

*flails weakly* It's a good thing he didn't have anything about hybridisation. It probably would have ended with a parenthetical bit about how if God wanted us to use hybrid cars He wouldn't have created oil for us. AUGH.)